Temba to the Rescue
Story of the Day #88
by Terrie Hope
Threatening black clouds moved ever-faster overhead, rolling in like a rough sea to announce the start of the rainy season. Following a blinding flash of lightening, the rumbling thunder vibrated the earth underfoot as though a great underground dragon had been disturbed. The wind whistled through the nearby trees. The light was fading fast.
Temba stood in the doorway of the family’s sleeping hut as he watched the approaching storm, a pang of fear shooting through his stomach. He knew that if it rained now the river would fill and his mother would be stranded on the other side.
His sister Tulu was cooking the evening meal, while their younger siblings chased each other and wrestled nearby in the family’s cooking hut. Temba could hear pretend growling and roaring, then the shrieks of laughter from Nonde and Sulu.
Suddenly, the rain fell cold and painful on Temba’s skin.
Temba wondered what he would do if his mother did not get back, but knew that Zulu men are warriors and do not show fear. I must go out and look for her, he decided.
He walked into the rain, leaving his young charges in the warmth and dryness of the cook hut. Temba found the path to the village deserted, the ground packed hard from the many feet that had worn the ground smooth. Even the huts that he passed were empty. Fear tied knots in his stomach now. With no one around, he knew that all he could do was return to the village, and hope that their mother would be back soon.
As he trotted back through the village, he heard screams from the cooking hut.
“Temba, help us!”
While he was gone, the pounding rain had triggered a flash flood that poured down the mountain hard enough to knock down part of the mud wall in the cook hut, letting the roof fall on Temba’s siblings, trapping them. Temba ran to the hut.
“Tulu, Nonde, Sulu, are you all right?” Temba shouted over the rain. He ran around the hut, looking for a way to reach the others.
How can I help them? I must get them out of there, he thought frantically. Oh, if only Father was here. He would know what to do. However, Temba knew that he had to be the man of the family while his father was away.
Temba looked around until he spotted a thin tree trunk that had been collected for the fire. He lifted the trunk and carried it across to the cooking hut.
“Go in there, please, go in there!” He pushed the trunk as hard as he could under the roof. The thin trunk was heavy and hard to push through the debris but once it was far enough under, he leaned hard on it, trying to lift the roof. At first nothing moved. He leaned harder, willing himself to be stronger and heavier.
“I will get you out of there – somehow!” he shouted over the howling wind.
“Hurry, Temba, please!” Tulu begged “The water is rising fast in here.”
Temba’s muscles ached. He put all his weight into the push and barely felt the roof shift. He was beginning to think that he had failed his parents. Even so, he refused to give up.
With all his strength, he pushed again, and suddenly the load was lighter. Temba realized other hands had joined him in pushing down on the trunk. God has heard my prayers.
“Push Temba,” a strong voice said beside him. “We can lift it.”
Temba’s knees shook from relief. “Mother, you’re back.”
Slowly Temba and his mother lifted the roof, until they had made enough space for his siblings to crawl out.
“Tulu, come quick!” Temba called to his sister. “Bring your brother and sister out here.”
One by one, the children crawled out from under the roof. Once they were all safely clear of the fallen debris, Temba and his mother let the roof settle down again. Temba turned to the younger children.
“I’m glad you’re okay, and I’m sorry I left you when I did.”
“You’re the best,” Tulu replied wrapping her thin arms around him. “If it wasn’t for your fast thinking, we’d still be trapped.”
“Temba, you have just proven that you are a man,” his mother added, laying her hand on his shoulder. “Your father will be proud.”
“But, Mother,” he said. “I should not have left them. It was my mistake that put them in danger.”
His mother smiled at him. “Everyone makes mistakes, but a man makes them right again. Trust me your father will be proud.”
The knot unclenched in Temba’s chest and he smiled. “Thank you, Mother.”
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December 04, 2011 at 3:30 pm, Marion Tickner said:
Great story in another setting. I love how Temba took the responsibility of being the “man of the house” and took charge.
December 03, 2011 at 3:07 pm, Bernice said:
I really enjoyed this story and look forward to the your next story.
December 02, 2011 at 1:11 am, Jill said:
Great story for my grandchildren. Well done!
November 30, 2011 at 3:06 pm, Hannah said:
I liked the story because it had nice plot structure, good suspense, and was easily understood.
November 30, 2011 at 2:51 pm, Lisa Glave said:
Terrie,
I loved this story! I will probably use this in my classroom, as it gives spectacular examples of very vivid writing. I could picture it all taking place in my mind. I am so proud of your efforts. Well worth the time you put into it!!
November 30, 2011 at 7:18 am, Susan said:
Well done, Terrie. This story has an interesting setting, a sympathetic main character, escalating tension and a child friendly, and encouraging, resolution. I thoroughly enjoyed it!
November 29, 2011 at 12:32 pm, Christine said:
Wonderful story! Would love to read more adventures with Temba and Tulu!
November 29, 2011 at 12:11 pm, Naomi said:
I’am aged 9 and I really liked the story.
WOW!!!!!!!!
November 29, 2011 at 11:21 am, Rachel said:
What a lovely heartwarming story.
November 29, 2011 at 6:27 am, Paula said:
A very nice story! I would love to read some more.. Im a fan Mrs.Hope!
November 29, 2011 at 3:59 am, Peter morris said:
Well done Terrie. If this is your first, then I look forward to many more. You have the ability to set a complete series of Tembalike stories. Good luck to you
November 28, 2011 at 2:35 pm, Katrina said:
Beautifully done, Terrie. I was rooting for Temba the whole way through! Lovely story.
November 28, 2011 at 11:49 am, Hilary Morris said:
Lovely story – well done
November 28, 2011 at 11:26 am, George Anthony Kulz said:
I love the story of Temba. Brilliant imagery, lots of action, and a solution and a message that is satisfying. I love how Temba is viewed by the different characters at the end. By himself, as a deserter. By his siblings, a hero. And by his mother, the man that Temba wishes to be.
Nice job!
November 27, 2011 at 8:06 pm, Claudine Gueh said:
I’ve enjoyed this adventure, too. My favourite line has got to be when Temba’s mother tells him “Everyone makes mistakes, but a man makes them right again …” The sensory descriptions were very good!
November 27, 2011 at 12:05 pm, Shauna said:
Go Temba!
I loved the setting. I could hear the rain and even smell the mud. The names were an excellent choice for this story. Well done. I too enjoyed the adventure.
November 27, 2011 at 10:49 am, Toni Down said:
Love it! Hope to see some more from you!
November 27, 2011 at 10:44 am, Kathryn Burgoyne said:
Brilliant
Lovely to have a story about another culture
Thoroughly enjoyed rreading it to my boys
November 27, 2011 at 10:35 am, Kate said:
What a delightful story–wonderful African imagery, and a very appealing main character, besides. I can see a whole book of Temba stories!
November 27, 2011 at 10:09 am, Anne E. Johnson said:
Wow! That was exciting!
November 27, 2011 at 9:37 am, Mary said:
Very good. Look forward to reading more.
November 27, 2011 at 7:17 am, Andrew Roberts said:
What a nice change in story content to the usual traditional western childrens’ stories, the family enjoyed the adventure.
November 27, 2011 at 7:10 am, Marie Elena said:
FABULOUS example of writing for children in a manner that respects their minds, and appeals to their senses. Perhaps we’ll see more of the brave and humble Temba (hint, hint).
November 27, 2011 at 6:39 am, Jan said:
Yay Temba! Great story with a lovely main character.